Tuesday, July 19, 2011

Will you please critique my story? [10 pts to honest opinions]?

It was rather dull. You have great descriptions and tell the audience enough to get a mental picture, but you need to liven it up a little more!(: It doesn't necessarily need to be happier, but it needs to be more interesting. You have great transitions, but try to explain what exactly is happening better. Make the reader want more.

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